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Yeah I think the chat room should be closed. It would definitely help the number of reviews. YWS is more about writing than chatting is it not?

Awesome start. I love superpower stories! :lol: Post more soon OK? :P

There's really nothing for me to critique- except that I agree it's too long. I really enjoyed reading it, some parts felt like it was good enough to publish. Oh ...

Hi airbear320! No I don't think it's too much information for the first page. You seem to have an interesting idea. However, there's nothing that exciting to grab the reader's ...

Ooh, those guys are harsh! I read all the other parts you wrote and I like them. From what I can tell it's a good idea. I'm just not sure ...

“Linder, there you are.” I turn at the sound of my name. It’s Thomas, the human in charge of helping new dragons. He’s a young human, sixteen, about the same ...

There's another one now. I watched it. It looks really cool. I loved Toy Story when I was younger and I want to see this one too. :elephant:

Hello adrenalinefriend! First, I have to say that I love your writing style. It flows so nicely and it's nice and easy to follow. The story plot is good. Your ...

Cool. In a way, I feel the same. And I'm sure a lot of people do too. If you ever post a story I'd like to do a review for ...

Hello peanut19! :D no it's not a good way to write: present tense. I kinda disagree with TheNewHero. Present tense is sometimes a good way to make the reader feel ...

Definitely worth continuing! :D

Neat idea. It will be interesting to see where this goes. About the 'feeling' of it. Your character has no emotions, shouldn't she be afraid? Also, you're not telling us ...

Cool. I tell this is going to be good. Don't have any comments, sorry. I hope you post more soon. I'd really like to read it. :)

I don't have any comments or suggestions. But I thought I'd just say how cool this is! So many possibilities. What will happen next? I really like the idea of ...

For our warnings died within the fog as lightning struck Mary Jane. LOL for some reason, this made me laugh. Just the image I got in my head. I think ...